Worlds of indecision and inefficiency
The vortex is pulling me in
Sucking me in
But then its all the same process
Finding or be found
Lose it all or gain some
The same process
Either way
Living an excuse of a life
You find a way to fight
The suction effect
And at that moment you have won
The battle since you've been born
That moment it's worth the victory
Then you start again
Living that excuse of a life - @edgy_girl
So what do you think? Drop your comments. Thanks
I'm liking this
ReplyDeleteIt would make a good trance song. It reminds me of the song 'Insomnia' by the band Faithless
Check it out here: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tBrUjvONIrA
Pretty decent. I thought it was rather short though..or maybe it's just me. It's a very familiar place, often times you wonder what your place is in this world, then at that very moment you achieve something no matter how trivial, it makes all the difference. Then you start all over again. I try to see life as a sport, training hard to achieve the goals I set for myself and that makes all the difference in the world. Well done.
ReplyDeleteThe process is short and direct. We are all caught up in this concept of relativity captured in your poem. Let's not lag on this threadmill of life we are all walking on. Looking forward to your next poem.
ReplyDelete@NIL: Thanks. heard the song too, buh instead of going into a trance i was nodding my head :s
ReplyDelete@awizi: well i guess, we all have been in that place at some point. Thanks for stopping
@digiace: Thanks for d comment.
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ReplyDeleteOh, the writer's beautiful mind!!! I could go
ReplyDeleteon for ages appreciating the art in this - but
at the risk of breaking the silent oath of
brevity, I'd stop here.
= Brief n Beautiful
Very nice,you got me spell-bounded.
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